Fighting Fire

MORE Battle Ensues!
June 22nd, 2010, 5:30 am

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Woo-Hoo!!!

cdbertram
Posted by cdbertram
June 22nd, 2010, 5:30 am
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Updated Sam sprites - Woo-Hoo!! Mark shows up - Woo-Hoo!!! More "wity" banter - Woo-Hoo!!!


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ZoneTh
Posted by ZoneTh
June 22nd, 2010, 6:54 pm
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You asked for my review. Here it is.

I see that you add the zoom effect to your comics. Good job. Zooming on cast members really helps add emotion and feel to the comic.
I'm not really sure, what the plot is. ( if there is one). Just saying. Sprites look like recolors with minor editing. I'm not saying that's bad, but usally the more better looking and more detailed sprites there. You will be flamed( yelled at) less.

You're speech bubbles have gotten a little better. But could still use some work. For example, if u have paint.net. Make the bubbles transparent. If you don't have paint.net, then never mind. You give the cast speech, but I don't really feel it. Try to add more emotion and sensitive feel to it. Please do less more random fighting and add a reason or
backstory to why the clash is happening.

I could probably say more, but I can't think of anything else right now.

Here is my review ( don't forget, you asked for it) - ZoneTH



cdbertram
Posted by cdbertram
June 22nd, 2010, 8:49 pm
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Thanks for the review. the plot will come out later, hopefully soon. About the sprites, these are what CDBertram is letting me use, and I don't want to upset him. I don't have paint.net, so I can't improve the speech bubbles, but I can add a different type of speech bubble, if you like. I don't know how to improve the speech, so any tips on that? The reasons for the fighting WILL come out, I promise. Thanks for the review.



ZoneTh
Posted by ZoneTh
June 22nd, 2010, 9:32 pm
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You said, that don't know to improve on the speech. Here is my tips. Corny jokes are mostly fail and looked downed at. Face expressions help to the speech. Make sure to add mouths to the sprites when they talk. As for speech... Use the background to help with emotions. Talk like real people would talk. Don't use words such as "huh!" or "hey" alot. And when there is intense moments, pause for a panel of silence, then have the person say something epic or astonishing



cdbertram
Posted by cdbertram
June 23rd, 2010, 7:26 am
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Okay, thanks for the help!



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